I just want to see Nine, Ten, and TenToo in the same room
with Nine looking back and forth between Ten and Tentoo before glaring at Ten like “What the fuck did you do?”
earthfire75 said: Hello! First, I'd like to say I really love your fics. And to that end, I would like to ask for a bit of guidance/advice. I'm working on a chapter of my own fic and I'm trying to write out a kissing scene, and a rather emotional one at that. I'm still really new to this and was wondering if you had or know of any sources I could go to for a little help pulling it together. Thank you.
Oh yay- there can never be enough kissing scenes in this universe!
Ramblings about Writing Kisses
Now, this is just my personal opinion (and I’m not, by far, an expert!), but when I write kisses, the lip-locking itself is usually the least important part. I’m much more concerned about:
- The lead up and the tension in the room. I often augment that tension (because it’s my favourite part!) by interrupting the usually angsty introspection to comment on a feature of their environment, e.g. “The water was dripping into the sink and there was a tiny sliver of light peeking in from between the closed curtains.” I like this because it not only draws out the suspense but if you do it right, you can infuse the tension into even these mundane details and show rather than tell an actor’s state of mind: the way we interpret our world is very much influenced by our emotions!.
- What the kiss means. Kissing is really just another form of expressing an emotion: which one do you want to show?
- Who initiates the kiss (and what this says about their character, development, state of mind)
- Whether the recipient goes to meet their lips or stays passive (and what this says about their character, development, state of mind)
- If they stay passive, long long until they respond? Remember, every second of shock/non-response will feel like an eternity for the kisser!
- Is it practiced/skilled/smooth or is it sloppy and imperfect? (I like sloppy, personally: it adds an element of urgency or first-time nerves.)
- How do they break away? (Is it abrupt, a gentle tapering, moving to the neck?)
- What do they do after the kiss? (are they panting, do their foreheads meet, do they make eye contact?)
- How do the characters feel after the kiss? (aroused; brainless; regretful; worried; awkward? Also, bodily reactions: swollen lips; shaky hands racing hearts?)
I find the actual kiss often tricky to write because, let’s be honest, it’s difficult to make tongue thrusts and salvia mingling sexy or sweet (or whatever tone you’re going for). As such, I usually focus on what the characters are sensing during it: taste, smell, touch, hearing, visual (eyes open or closed?) and their emotional reactions to being kissed.
When I bother describing the dance of the tongues (ugh, I hate that phrase! but I use it…) I sometimes like to imagine the tongues are tiny personifications of the actors themselves, and that they’re interacting and conversing same as their full sized counterparts. One makes a move, the other responds, they’re tentative and then joyful: they react to the others’ actions.
I often feel like I’m recycling ad nauseam the same old words (explore, dance, thrust, biting, lips lips lips lips) but I am also very careful about the type of words I use and their tone. ‘Thrust’ for example is very urgent and a little aggressive so I wouldn’t use it if I want the kiss to be sweet or hesitant. ‘Sucking’ and ‘slurping’ I would only use in certain contexts too. Kissing and sex is often all about dominance, conquering, and giving in, so I will sometimes pilfer words/phrases/images from that vocabulary category and adapt it for the kissing: e.g. ‘victory march’.
Here’s some great references I’ve used at some point or the other: I especially like the first one because sometimes I just need help finding the right word…
One more thing: don’t feel like you have to write an extremely detailed account of every muscle movement in a three minute long kiss. If you want to, you should, but most of the most effective kisses I’ve read are short and leave things up to the reader’s imagination in terms of technique: kisses are usually a gateway and not the be-all-and-end-all, whether to further emotional intimacy, for revealing feelings, to assert power, etc. You can also slow down your plot waaay too much if you ramble on for pages about one kiss…
Hope that helps, good luck!